Submitting to you
Makes breathing impossible:
You do take my breath away
Dominating you
Assuming vital control:
How we both enjoy breathplay
Last month we looked at the mondo form of
the katuata. As I’m sure everyone remembers, the Katuata is interpreted by
western poets as a three-line form with a syllabic structure of 5-7-7.
The sedoka form of the katuata comes in two
stanzas with each performing a separate function. The first stanza presents a scene. The second
stanza shows that scene from another perspective. If we look at the poem above
we’re considering the same relationship in stanza one from the perspective of a
submissive and, in stanza two, the same relationship is shown from the perspective
of the dominant partner.
As a tool for reminding us about the
importance of perspective, the sedoka is well worth considering. It’s also a
fun way looking at one subject from a pair of diverse perspectives.
Tasting your sweetness
Savouring your musky scent
Drinking your satisfaction
Feeling your wet tongue
As it explores my bare flesh
And transports me to new heights
As always, I look forward to seeing your
poems in the comments box below.
