Writing Exercise – Katuata / Sedoka

by | October 6, 2016 | Writing Exercise | 2 comments

 by Ashley Lister

Submitting to you
Makes breathing impossible:
You do take my breath away


Dominating you
Assuming vital control:
How we both enjoy breathplay

Last month we looked at the mondo form of
the katuata. As I’m sure everyone remembers, the Katuata is interpreted by
western poets as a three-line form with a syllabic structure of 5-7-7.

The sedoka form of the katuata comes in two
stanzas with each performing a separate function.  The first stanza presents a scene. The second
stanza shows that scene from another perspective. If we look at the poem above
we’re considering the same relationship in stanza one from the perspective of a
submissive and, in stanza two, the same relationship is shown from the perspective
of the dominant partner.

As a tool for reminding us about the
importance of perspective, the sedoka is well worth considering. It’s also a
fun way looking at one subject from a pair of diverse perspectives.

Tasting your sweetness
Savouring your musky scent
Drinking your satisfaction


Feeling your wet tongue
As it explores my bare flesh
And transports me to new heights

As always, I look forward to seeing your
poems in the comments box below.

Ashley Lister

Ashley Lister is a UK author responsible for more than two-dozen erotic novels written under a variety of pseudonyms. His most recent work, a non-fiction book recounting the exploits of UK swingers, is his second title published under his own name: Swingers: Female Confidential by Ashley Lister (Virgin Books; ISBN: 0753513439) Ashley’s non-fiction has appeared in a variety of magazines, including Forum, Chapter & Verse and The International Journal of Erotica. Nexus, Chimera and Silver Moon have published his full-length fiction, with shorter stories appearing in anthologies edited by Maxim Jakubowski, Rachel Kramer Bussel and Mitzi Szereto. He is very proud to be a regular contributor to ERWA.

2 Comments

  1. Lisabet Sarai

    Maybe the poem I posted last month is more of a Sedoka than a Mondo?

    It's a bit hard for me to see the difference.

  2. Ashley Lister

    The mondo is usually perceived as two sides of a conversation. The sedoka is one scene from two separate perspectives. I think there's bound to be some overlap between these two forms. 😉

    Ash

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